Senior School Monckton has been working extremely hard over the last few weeks in developing their persuasive writing skills. Students have worked particularly hard in using a range of persuasive
techniques, showing - not telling and engaging the reader.
We have been working on our “A change for the better” persuasive texts, where students needed to choose an issue, either within the school or community and write why this needs to be fixed or changed.
Below are our introductions to these...
Do you know that a student will learn more if they bring a laptop to school? 95% of students presume they should have a laptop to help them with their school work. They can find new apps to benefit them with new learning skills and it shows they can take responsibility by looking after their laptop. It has been documented that some students can take responsibility for their own property like laptops.
Here’s a really great idea to make students learn better and teachers job easier. Imagine a way for students to have fun and be more willing to learn. This could all be achieved by letting students have longer play times.
Fun, cool, engaging. I want all kids to feel like this. They will if they have a laptop. A laptop will be useful for your kids if they need to use the calculator or dictionary. Parents wouldn’t have to spend so much money on other equipment.
Eager, exciting, thrilling. If you want your students to do their work at school and home then give them a laptop. You can send work at home or at school. A laptop can teach kids responsibility and kids can use the spellcheck function.
Do you honestly think that it is polite, responsible and acceptable to just drop your rubbish anywhere? It is utterly disgusting how people think that it is ok to just drop your litter anywhere you want to! It goes down the drain and into the ocean where these poor innocent animals have to live! Would you like it if you had to live in a filthy, dirty, grimy place? It can choke animals and potentially kill them!!
Students at Pakenham Springs must not drop litter. There are bins… use them! Do people realize that they are killing animals with rubbish? Despicable! Littering kills, littering destroys environments and littering is just a waste of time!
Useful, helpful and entertaining. If students had a laptop they will find it a lot easier to use all the resources. Do you want your child to have a good education? If there were laptops it will show responsibility towards all students. If students had their own laptop it will prepare the students for high school.
Simple, beneficial, helpful. Do these people realise that all senior school students will find it so much easier with a laptop of their own? It will help them to show maturity, it will prepare them for high school, it will also be much more helpful for work at home and school. Who would want a stupid boring old book over a useful and smart laptop?
Pakenham Springs students should stop littering NOW. Do these people realize that they are littering and killing animals all around the world? Why don’t they start to use bins to ensure other students’ safety? We must stop littering or the environment will be destroyed.
Do you think your child is responsible enough to look after a pet? If Pakenham Springs had pets kids could learn how to take responsibility and then you could trust them to look after one.
Cruel, mindless and monstrous! Imagine if you were one of those poor innocent animals soon to die from pollution. 99.9% of janitors agree with me when I declare that pollution has a monumental effect on the community.
Easy, helpful and fun. If students have a laptop it would be easier for students to learn. Actually, a laptop would help them for the better and they could access the internet for use.
Students should have more playtime because if they have more they will be happy. More kids will come to the school and the school will be bigger.
What kind of evil monster goes past a homeless person without helping them? They are poor, hopeless and in need. Students at schools should donate money to the homeless. This will teach students to be considerate and caring. If we consider donating we will help them with supplies they require and it will show that you care. Homeless people are never in a comfortable place and if they don’t have enough food or water they can die. If we help the homeless it will teach kids to show respect and they will learn a million words to describe how they feel for other people.
Healthy, Enjoyable and Friendly! Do you really want your kid to be alone and depressed? Of course not!!! If kids get an hour of playtime, they can make new friends and play games that they’ve never played before!
Hydration is a vital thing for kids to have, so why make students drink water, when they can drink a stronger source of hydration?
Happy, healthy, friendly. Students at Pakenham Springs will feel happier if they get more playtime. Imagine kids getting fresh air while having time with their friends and doing exercise. Can you believe that?
Students should always get more amazing, awesome and fun recess and lunch times. If there is more outside time then more extraordinary people will come to the school, more people will like the school and students won’t be bored.
Relaxing, fascinating and enjoyable! Who doesn’t want to leave all their worries behind, and step into the world of a good fit book? Students in primary school should do Silent Uninterrupted Reading for Fun (S.U.R.F). It would help students in many ways, including getting them ready for learning after snack, picking-up better words and utilising them in writing and students can grow a life-long love for reading.
Amazing, cool, awesome. The school council should include a pool at Pakenham Springs because some people can sign up for a school swimming tournament. This can be held in school instead of going to smelly public pools. We have to get a swimming pool.
Elated, engaged and exited. This is why students will want a laptop. It will allow kids to show suitable work and how they have developed.
Gifted, engaged, overjoyed. People are scandalized that Year 5 and 6 students at Pakenham Springs do not have laptops. If students own a laptop students can finish learning at home, students can play games without restriction and students can access most resources in and out of school in just a few clicks. Who doesn’t want a laptop?
Pakenham Springs Primary School should get an indoor pool. The school needs it because it is getting very hot some days and it’s not fair to leave the kids outside, we can teach kids to swim and we can have a swimming carnival.